26 January 2011
A Great Getaway
The scorching sun lay down on this secluded paradise, with limited inhabitants roaming this area. The sea gets its rich blue colour from the chalky sky. Palm trees crowd together on the white velvety sand; rocks form together in the big open sea, forming a magnificent sight. A boat passing by would look at its leafy and green inner area, while his gaze transfers to the warm, hot beach, which leads to the clear, open ocean. This top notch island would make a great getaway from the hectic and busy life of the city, where in here one could bask in sunlight, and listen to the gushing waves, while finally falling asleep...
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Not a bad try, but there are a few problems:
1. Tense - I notice you started with the past tense but switched to present tense later. It should not be that way. Stick to one tense throughout.
2. Description - I do not see a sun in the picture, neither do I see inhabitants. Also, do not describe inhabitants as 'limited'. Use few if you have to. And chalk is white, so the sea would be white if it is according to that.
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